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Literature
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It was a dark and stormy night.
The Earth cradled itself in blankets of black clouds, awaiting its end.
Literature
Dead
Torn and chaffed down
to a selfless mass of flesh and empty neurons
I am dead
again
I am reset, restarted, but not renewed
empty
a blank sheet
with no one but an infant
to scribble the basic coding and awareness mechanisms
There is no second birth or reincarnation
the gods either lie or do not know
I am here
staring and stroking keys
with a ghastly automation
and an inner drive to explain:
self self self self self self self self self self self self self
When there is no knowledge of its meaning.
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Fallen
When I was little, I held my hands up
and there was always a bigger pair
there to pick me up, raise me up
Dark and cold both accumulate near the ground
but I had found
a path to heaven, now forgotten
as the earth turns 'round;
So overcome by confusion, how...?
I can't cast my demons out
one devil still pulls me down
off the earth and off my gentle cloud
I lay upon the ground,
bloodied, broken, beaten down
and lament my fate, silenced now
He recalls his immoralities as if
they were someone else's little slips
and though his words have scarred me
much deeper than any knife or whip
he parades through town, a man, a god
going on about life as
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Very, Very creative. You can feel what the characters are going through. It makes a lot of sense, and it's really out-of-the-box writing. You have a little lack of vision, but nothing someone would normally notice unless they were an analyst. On the up side, you have a good feel. You made the characters real. Real enough for each person to associate with each character. You make each word believable and you make every action feel-able. You have a good feel on the area surrounding the characters and you are very descriptive. All in all, I give this 4.75 out of 5 Stars. Good Job. You get hugs.